My written work

beyondgodlike · 12-06-2008, 09:25

Well, i dont know what to say. This is my 1st written work and it's only the 1st chapter, but I'd like the community to check it out first and please see if you can find and correct the mistakes I've made (really sucks at grammar) and contribute some opinions to me (about the plot, etc.)

Here's the link
http://www.4shared.com/file/50999502.../1_online.html

P.S: There's some heavy language but it's only for the sake of the work, don't get offended.

12-06-2008, 09:25
beyondgodlike Member Join Date: 26-09-2007 Posts: 71 KL$: 688 Awarded 2 time(s) Received 2 thank(s) School: PTTH Kim Liên Class: A1 (2007-2010) Location: Fort Benning, Georgia, United States of America	Well, i dont know what to say. This is my 1st written work and it's only the 1st chapter, but I'd like the community to check it out first and please see if you can find and correct the mistakes I've made (really sucks at grammar) and contribute some opinions to me (about the plot, etc.) Here's the link http://www.4shared.com/file/50999502.../1_online.html P.S: There's some heavy language but it's only for the sake of the work, don't get offended. ------------------------------ DFB.最英俊網絡